Entry TWO - Peer Review (Vandhanaa's WA1)

Vaaddhanaa's essay in response to question one is generally coherent and clear, and the points are distributed into well-segmented paragraphs. It also has a good mix of paraphrasing of the given information and statistics , but is rather lacking in her own thoughts and ideas, which make it seem almost like a ‘summary’ of the article.

The essay elaborates on the natural and man-made problems and their relation, but there does not seem to clearly illustrate two supporting arguments for those elaborations, as mentioned in the introductory paragraph, which in contrast provides a coherent presentation of the question’s topic and key ideas.

Likewise, the paragraphs generally contain examples and statistical information that lend much support to the intended point. However, the subsequent points in each paragraph are not organised in the most effective manner, and as a reader, it is not easy to link the listed examples to their immediate ideas.

The essay as a whole is an easy read, but to find and chain all the points provided together requires a little extra work. The organisation pattern is such that it is easy to lose track of the big picture that is the main idea. The conclusion is tied to the essay as a whole, but concurs loosely with the ideas and statements portrayed in the thesis paragraph.

Entry ONE - Summary on Climate Change

Climate change has been a cause of concern for over a century, but has recently come under heavier scrutiny. Studies and models show the drastic effects global warming already has on earth, and is steadily worsening, particularly with increasing levels of greenhouse gases. In addition, human activity proves to be the largest and most obvious contributor to earth’s degradation.

Scientists are attempting to categorize and measure various aspects of the problems at hand, and have created Global and Regional Climate Models in order to study and predict climate shifts. Zooming into country-level statistics, it can be seen that the size of carbon footprints left by each country are closely tied to not only the population size, but also the level of affluence.

Each country's share is further broken down into more intimate levels, where institutional regulations and individual actions for climate stabilization come into play. Institutionally, the number of ways to cut emissions and wastage, and promote renewability, are limited in their effectiveness. It all boils down to the education, action and climate-consciousness of each and every person to truly make a difference.